Tuesday, October 23, 2012

The Other Cinderella

Last night, I came across the idea to rewrite the ending to "Cinderella" where one of the step-sisters ended up with the Prince. Here is my version...starting from when the Prince began trying the slipper on the women in the village. Please tell me what you think.... (Couldn't thin of another title...lol)

The Other Cinderella
            As the Prince’s manservant went around trying the glass slipper on all the women in the castle village, Cinderella’s excitement grew so much that she almost blurted out her secret. That she was the one the shoe belonged to. Somehow, she contained herself and patiently waited until the Royal Carriage stopped at her cottage.
            Her mean old step-mom and two step-sisters rushed to the door. They didn’t wait to be asked if the slipper belonged to them; instead they crowded the Prince’s manservant until he almost lost his balance.
            Finally, the man was able to restore some sort of order and had the women line up, even Cinderella; against her step-mom’s wishes and evil glares, she stood at the end of the line.
            As expected, the shoe did not fit ugly Dora’s foot. Dora, with her nasty looking wart on the end of her chin, making it look like she always had a piece of food hanging from her mouth. Cinderella’s step-mom made Cindy’s life miserable after dad died from being crushed by the wagon wheel he was working on when the horses got spooked by a flying bug three years ago.
            Step-mom decided that Cindy could stay, as long as she remembered to stay in her place. She was a mere servant now, after all. Cinderella smiled brightly as the servant shook his head, indicating that the shoe did not fit Dora.
            He moved on to nasty Nelda. Nelda was HUGE! She was at least three hundred pounds of bacon fat, cream cheese, and pizza crust wrapped up in human flesh. Cindy had a hard time getting Nelda’s bed sheets clean for all the crumbs in the bed. Nelda pushed and the manservant pulled; that shoe was about to break, thought Cinderella. She was glad when he shook his head, again indicating that Nelda did not belong with the shoe.
            Cinderella wished she could jump ahead of Zurna. Of the other women, Zurna was the most presentable one, if not at all pretty. She had Cinderella’s appealing figure, she was the cleanest, and she smelled nicer than her mom and sister. But, she was meaner than a rabid dog. Cinderella endured much physical abuse from Zurna just because Cinderella had the gall to be born of her mom and dad.
            Cinderella and Zurna were close in age, Zurna older by one year. Cindy at first looked up to Zurna during the three years Cindy’s dad was alive and married to Zurna’s mom. Zurna was patient with Cindy, too, even kind at times. But after dad’s funeral, Zurna turned the tables and showed her true self. Cindy had every reason to be afraid of her.
            When the shoe slipped onto Zurna’s foot for a perfect fit, Cinderella almost blacked out. She saw, but didn’t believe…she COULDN’T believe. She knew personally that the show was hers. Cindy had the matching slipper in the treasure box that she kept under her bed.
            She slapped herself.
            This can’t be happening, she thought. She slapped herself again, this time hard enough to get the attention of those partying and celebrating women who would just as soon forget all about her.
            “What’s the matter with you, runt?” Zurna asked with a wide smile on her plain face (no warts or zits for her). “Aren’t you happy for me, sis?” Zurna crowed.
            “How can this be? That slipper doesn’t belong to you,” Cinderella almost burst into tears, knowing that she could not reveal that she was the rightful owner of that slipper.
            “If the shoe fits, my dear, sweet, beauty of a sister,” Nelda pushed her fat face into Cindy’s with an explosion of sour breath from her lungs. “Then she MUST wear it, isn’t that true, noble sir?” Nelda asked the Prince who had only just now joined the crowd in the cottage.
            Prince Charming looked from Zurna to Cinderella and back again. And again. He looked askance at his manservant, “Did the slipper really fit HER?” pointing at Zurna with obvious distrust in his voice.
            He looked to Zurna and asked a question only the girl he’d danced with last night at the ball would know the answer to, “What is my favorite number?”
            He had told the girl he’d danced with at the ball his favorite number because he could come up with nothing else to say at the time.
            He studied the girl with the slipper on her foot. There was nothing familiar about her. He was sure that she was not the girl from the ball last night. If she got the number wrong, he would know for sure.
            Only there would be nothing he could do about it. The King was bound by his word and his word was that the Prince would wed the lady for whom the glass slipper fit. There HAD to be only ONE woman for whom the shoe would fit. Didn’t there?
            He waited for the answer to come while eyeing the last girl standing in line waiting. Now, that girl looked familiar. The way her blue eyes hid beneath a feather’s nest of long eyelashes. The way she dipped her head at just the slightest angle to make it appear she wasn’t studying him as well. Her small waist with the apron belt wrapped twice around. Her delicate fingers. Her tiny feet. The slipper HAD to be hers. But, no, it fit this other dainty, plain but not beautiful; sturdy but not delicate woman.
            “Twelve, your majesty,” Zurna answered with a curtsy. She was pretty sure the answer was wrong, but the King’s word was the King’s word. And the word said the Prince would marry the woman who fit the slipper, NOT the woman who answered twenty questions.
            Both Cinderella’s head and the Prince’s snapped back to attention. Zurna’s answer was wrong! But there was nothing either of them could do about it.
            Cinderella started to cry. The answer was “infinity plus one.” He’d whispered the answer in her ear as they’d danced in the Garden of the Red Roses last night at the ball. Cinderella told him afterwards that “infinity” wasn’t exactly a number but “plus one” made a difference and they’d both laughed.
            That’s when the clock had begun to strike at midnight. Without explanation, Cinderella gave the Prince a short mouth-to-mouth kiss that felt like forever and then had taken off at a full out sprint towards her “carriage” waiting for her at the bottom of the stairs.
            Back to the present, she watched and her heart sank as the Prince shifted his gaze, regret filling his every facial feature, from Cinderella to Zurna and instructed the manservant to gather all of Zurna’s belongings and load them into the Royal Carriage. Zurna would become his bride.
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            Cinderella sat in her room crying. She didn’t understand what had just happened. Her fairy God-mother suddenly appeared.
            “What the heck just happened in there?” Fairy God-Mother Mabel stood in all her pretty African-American beauty. “That shoe and that title should be YOURS, girl! What happened?” Mabel studied Cinderella’s fallen, wet face.
            “Oh sugar,” she held Cindy in her massive arms. “Don’t you worry none. I’m gonna get to the bottom of this and find out how that girl stole your place.”
            Poof! Cinderella almost fell over; Fairy God-Mother Mabel had vanished.
            Still trying to compose herself, Cinderella almost jumped outta her skin as Dora burst into the room demanding Cindy get the place cleaned up.
            “There’s gonna be a party!” Dora yelled and slammed the door to Cinderella’s room.
            Before leaving the room, Cinderella had to be sure she wasn’t going crazy. She pulled her treasure box from under her bed. There, where the other glass slipper should have been, was a ratty old open-toed house slipper, so dirty Cinderella couldn’t quite claim she knew what color the thing had even originally held.
            She didn’t understand. How could anyone have known that she had put her own glass slipper in this box to begin with? And how on earth had they gotten it out of there?
            Faced with the fact that she probably would never know what happened, Cinderella threw the old dirty slipper away from her and was about to close up the box when she noticed a piece of paper had been placed under the slipper. “This is not the end!”
            Cinderella still didn’t know what to think. She hoped Fairy God-Mother Mabel could come up with some sort of answer. She left the treasure box out and went to “clean the place up.”
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            Fairy God-Mother Mabel was stumped…….for all of three minutes. She stomped back and forth in her little cottage hidden in the woods of the castle village. She paced the floor for exactly three minutes.   And then the explanation of what happened hit her and she knew she’d been beaten by her own step-sister.
            Fairy God-Mother Samantha was just mean and angry for no good reason. Samantha was a beautiful African-American god-mother. She had naturally long flowing, thick light brown hair. Her skin was a smooth chocolate color with absolutely no blemishes with no help. She was a pretty and physically beautiful woman. But, she was mean and deceitful. Because her mother had died giving birth to Samantha. As a growing child, Samantha blamed herself for never having the chance to meet and know her mom. Mabel was a great very older sister, but she was no substitute for the mom Samantha had “killed.”
            Samantha blamed herself and she hated herself and that hatred made her do things she would never be able to undo. Once a fairy god-mother makes a move, it cannot be stopped. It will play on until an end or until another god-mother could come up with a way to deter the move. Mabel had no idea how to deter Samantha’s move…she didn’t even know what Samantha’s move was.
            The general plan of the fairy god-mothers had always been to bring a woman for the Prince to wed. Mabel’s plan had been to help Cinderella escape her prison by bringing her to the Prince’s attention. Samantha’s plan had been just to deter Mabel’s plan. It didn’t matter that Samantha may have made a mean woman a future Queen of the Kingdom, as long as Samantha’s plan deterred Mabel’s plan.
            “Samantha!” Mabel yelled. She really wanted to get Samantha’s attention. A silent scream would normally do it, but this time she really needed to be heard. She yelled again, “SAMANTHA!” Loud and long.
            Samantha whispered, “yes, big sister?”
            “Samantha, what have you done? What have I done to you that you would interfere with my work? Why have you paired the Prince with Zurna? Do you know what you’ve created?” Fairy God-Mother Mabel waved her arms around as she ranted to her little sister.
            Once she finally calmed down, Samantha said “I did the girl a favor,” and began to walk away. Mabel stopped her by simply holding her hand outstretched in front of her.
            “Please explain.”
            “The King does not approve of the girl. Once her mean sister gets to the castle, she will be in the same position Cinderella is in now, used as a servant. Only, she will sleep on the floor in the dungeon, a damp and dark and lonely place, as punishment for putting the Prince under some kind of enchanting spell to make him fall in love with her. Cinderella will have to wait three months before the Prince realizes that the slipper in fact does not belong to Zurna. And she will have to wait another three months before the Prince can convince his father the King that the lovely, beautiful girl in the Garden of the Red Roses did not enchant him with magic, but with her very own wonderful personality.”
            Samantha turned to look at her big sister. “I hate myself, Mother-Mabel, NOT this kingdom.”
            As tears filled both women’s eyes, Samantha said, “Cinderella will, at her step-mother’s party, finally understand what happened today. Because I will tell her. And she will believe me.”
            Mabel couldn’t speak at first. “Why?” she croaked when she found her voice. “Why will she believe you?”
            “Because you will tell her that although I am mean and can do deceitful things, I cannot tell a lie. It is in our genetic makeup. It is a part of our DNA, us fairy god-mothers, that we must at all times tell the truth, even when we allow others to be not so truthful.”
            Mabel knew that Samantha spoke the truth, as she’d just explained, it was impossible for fairy god-mothers to literally tell a lie. But, she could not help but wonder how Samantha had come to know the plans of the King. She asked.
            “I was simply eaves dropping, dear sister.” Samantha explained that she was lurking in the Garden of the Red Roses after witnessing the “absolutely gorgeous” transformation that Mabel had performed on the already beautiful Cinderella and watched the child run from the Garden at the first stroke of midnight.
            “The King held the Prince back from going after her and demanded to know what kind of spell he was under. The Prince failed to convince his father that he was under any spell and that the girl was just a nice and beautiful girl. After the Prince managed to break away from dear old dad to go after Cinderella, dad declared that he would find a way to punish the little witch for her treachery. Little Cindy losing one of her slippers helped his plan along perfectly.” Samantha was still standing where her sister’s outstretched arm held her.
            Her eyes twinkled with excitement. Punishment talk always brought her spirits up. “But, I could not let Cinderella be punished for just wearing a pretty dress, so I made Zurna take her place. Zurna hits Cindy anyway. Time for her to pay.” And with a violent shake of her body, she at once broke from her sister’s hold and transformed herself into a village commoner attending Cinderella’s step-mother’s party.
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            At the party, Cinderella was busy being serving hostess to all the village dwellers who came out to celebrate with the “evil ones.” She was tired, despondent, and her feet hurt. She wished aloud, when she finally had a moment alone, that she could escape her mean step-mother and sister. Now that Zurna was going to be Princess, it was a bitter-sweet relief not to have to worry about the physical abuse. The daily beating and berating would be over, but Zurna had Cindy’s man.
            The thought made Cinderella want to throw up.
            Suddenly, there was a very pretty woman standing next to her, whispering something in her ear. As Cinderella began to focus on what the woman was saying to her, she felt compelled to go to her room.
            She moved that way, knowing that Dora would scream at her. Cinderella notice that the woman at her side was moving with her. She made it unnoticed to her bedroom door. A quick look at the crowd of people told her that everyone was busy congratulating Dora and Dora was way too busy with the attention to give any to Cindy. Cinderella slipped inside her room.
            Fairy God-Mother Mabel was there wrapping her large arms around her telling Cinderella that all that the strange woman had said to her was true.
            “Well, we can’t keep her in a dungeon,” Cindy sympathized.
            “That is her fate for now,” fairy God-Mother Mabel explained. “We cannot undo that for six months. And then you will take your place to release her, if you wish.”
            Cinderella thought about it and grudgingly accepted this news as expected.
            “How am I to continue living with those two?” she cried.
            Fairy God-Mother Mabel touched her nose and outside the bedroom, Cindy could hear Nelda scream.
            Yanking the door open to see what happened, Cinderella was surprised to see Nelda being escorted to a carriage of her own by a not completely handsome man.
            “I will make you my bride,” the man shouted and Nelda screamed again. “Yes! Yes! Yes! I will go with you!”
            Dora cried a different cry, “No! Do not leave me here, my daughter! I want to go with you!”
            And yet another man, not completely ugly, said out loud, “My son, is there room in the carriage for one more?”
            All four of them rode away to a future unknown.
            Cinderella went to bed a heap happier than she had been in all the last three years.
THE END
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